改英語作文

㈠ 修改一下英語作文

才看到樓主的話，既然這樣說，我又做了許多修改，添加了一些高級句型，在文章中以數字一一說明。

總體來說這篇讀後感寫的很好，只有一些小問題，多屬於時態方面和細節方面的。我稍微做了一些修改和潤色。
一樓說的也很好，但是樓主只讓修改這篇文章的語病，我就這樣做了，如果有問題，還可私聊。
My favourite great book is Three Days to See written by Helen Keller. This book impressed me（1）. It told me how lucky we are. Helen had a serious illness when she was nineteen months. Although she survived from the illness, she was unable to see and hear. She was in a fret at the beginning. But with the help of Sullivan , she surmounted the difficulties .At last, she became a successful person（2）.

My favourite scene in the book is when Helen imagined three days to see（3）. She said 「Oh, how many things I can see if I had the power of sight for just three days!」we can see, how precious it was for Helen Keller （4）. But （5）, I think that people can realize the importance of the sight and sound only after they have personally expericenced the dark and silence life（6）.

Helen is the hero of the story, but there are （7）other important characters. Sullivan is a patient teacher （8）and she gave her love to Helen（9）, she let Helen have confidence and help her get out of darkness days（10）.

The themes of the book are to do with persistence and life（11）. It describes how Helen spent the dark and silence life（12）. Finally, it talks about the meaning of life and how to spend our life meaningful（13）.

1 impressed me後面加上a lot，更好，還有時態有點問題，改為一般現在時。
2 became a successful person後面加上who was worth others' respect，值得別人的尊敬。
3 imagined three days to see後面改為imagined that she had three days to see
4 這里最好補充說明一下為什麼很珍貴，我加上了if she realized that dream如果她實現了那個夢想
5 這里沒有轉折關系，改為After finishing reading this book，讀完這本書後
6 the dark and silence life改為the darkness and silence of life生命中的黑暗和寂靜
7 other改為some other一些其它的
8 Sullivan is a patient teacher 改為Sullivan was a patient teacher ，時態問題
9 she gave her love to Helen改為she lavished affection on Helen，她對海倫傾注了所有的愛
10 and help her get out of darkness days.改為and helped her get out of dark days.
11這句話略顯平淡，我改成A theme of persistence and life is proposed in this boook.這本書揭示了恆心和人生的主題。
12the dark and silence life改為the dark and silent life，這樣不與上文重復
13最後一句是收尾，需是點睛之筆，我改成I appreciate Hellen Keller. Her life is a miracle, she stronly face the difficulties which can detroy one』s mind of living. Her life is a tragedy, but the world in her heart is full of love. Her spirit will encourage all of us, forever.

改過的文章如下：
My favourite great book is Three Days to See written by Helen Keller. This book impresses me a lot. It tells me how lucky we are. Helen had a serious illness when she was nineteen months. Although she survived from the illness, she was unable to see and hear. She was in a fret at the beginning. But with the help of Sullivan , she surmounted the difficulties .At last, she became a successful person who was worth others' respect.

My favourite scene in the book is when Helen imagined that she had three days to see. She said 「Oh, how many things I can see if I had the power of sight for just three days!」we can see, how precious it was for Helen Keller if she realized that dream. After finishing reading this book, I think that people can realize the importance of the sight and sound only after they have personally expericenced the darkness and silence of life.

Helen is the hero of the story, but there are some other important characters. Sullivan was a patient teacher and she lavished affection on Helen, and she let Helen have confidence and helped her get out of dark days.

A theme of persistence and life is proposed in this boook. It describes how Helen spent the dark and silent life. I appreciate Hellen Keller. Her life is a miracle, she stronly face the difficulties which can detroy one』s mind of living. Her life is a tragedy, but the world in her heart is full of love. Her spirit will encourage all of us forever.

祝樓主進步！
要是答案還滿意的話，記得採納哦，O(∩_∩)O謝謝~！

㈡ 英語作文怎麼改

換用一些不同句子結構或者更高級的單詞和短語，慢慢改寫吧。提高寫作水平可以每天用英文寫日記，或者練練英語範文然後給老師評改，慢慢提升自己，然後把好的範文背下來，就自然有感覺了，慢慢培養語感就ok 了。希望有所幫助。加油哦！

㈢ 英語作文修改

第一句話image 應改為imagine ，後面是賓語從句，應用陳述句語序，即：what our life will be like...

㈣ 修改英語作文

語法似乎沒什麼問題...是內容不好嗎

㈤ 修改英語作文，謝謝。

And if you feel tired,you can listen to music for relax,and take a walk is a good way,too.這句話有錯，復應改為：
you can listen to music to realx,and taking a walk is a good way.
（你可以制聽音樂來放鬆。表示所做的目的的用to. 這里的take是作主語，改為動名詞taking.）

Good lucky!應改為：Good luck!
（good是形容詞，形容詞修飾的是名詞。luck是名詞，lucky是形容詞。）

㈥ 改英語作文(IELTS)

Most of Child-hood dreams are creative or crazy. I』d love to listen to everyone』s childhood dreams. lots of people never done their childhood dreams, but chasing the dream is great propulsion to change their lives, sometimes, unexpected things would happen. During my curiosity personality, I heard a strong fireman who wanted to be a Disneyland toy maker, and I would like to share my child-hood today.

My child-hood dream was created by my dad indirectly, and that was to build a school for some children who could not pay their school fee in China. Certainly, my school also provides food, a place to live and ecation of high quality, it would need a lot of money to build a school, but nothing could stop me from pursuing the goals. On the other hand, I unearth some ways to run this school. For our students , I would require them to sign a contract, the terms of the agreement are: Firstly, they needn』t to contribute 5% of the salary for the school until they have helped three children like them in China. There are two advantages of this contract. It would be a large income from them, thus, it would cover lots of expenditure. Secondly , the number of the beneficiary could have a rapid increase.

Therefore , maybe I can not complete this dream , I would suggest my son to do it. I hope you would hear about The School of XXX in China. When you hear anything about this name of school, it means I have succeed. 我能看到的，應該還有錯啊

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請問你這句句子想表達什麼意思專呢屬?我不太理解.

㈧ 求改一篇英語作文

針對這種觀點類類型抄的文章，其格式為：先說明現象，再列出不同的觀點，再說明自己的觀點。 因此你的文章結構是不錯的。 而且你的詞彙也很好，很准確。 但是有幾個小錯誤：1.第二行 some people 後加think. 2.第二段 第三行，teenager後加s.
總體寫的很好，祝你學習順利